To write the first section of an explanation text

Key Stage 2

English

How Bees make Honey - Explanation writing

﻿Hello everyone. It is Mrs. Hardesty here for your English lesson today. In today's lesson, you are going to be doing lots of writing. You're going to be writing the start of your explanation texts. So should we get our hands ready to do some amazing writing. Get your hands like this and this, and then roll them round. So that you're ready flexible and warmed-up. Push your hands together, stretch them like this push them them together. Well done give your fingers a bit of a twist and a massage all ready? Fantastic, let's start. This is what we're going to do in our lesson today. We're going to start with some spelling practise. We're going to look particularly at the spelling of the technical vocabulary words that we are going to be using in our writing today. And now we're going to read an example of brilliant writing that explains the first stages of the honey making process and picking out all the things that make it fantastic that we can use in our own writing. And then you are going to write the first section of the honey making process. For this lesson, you will need your plan, your word bank, and paper and pencil. So please can you make sure you have all of those things now, and then we can start our lesson. We're going to start with our spelling check warmup. I have full words here, full examples of technical vocabulary that you will use in your writing today. And each one of them has something slightly unusual in the way that it's spelled. We need to make sure that we get correct. So let's look at each one in turn Nectar. So nectar is spelled with an A-R at the end of the word, rather than what you might expect, which might be an E-R. So we need to remember that nectar is spelled with an A-R What does it finish with? Well done Enzyme. So enzyme sounds like it's spelled with an I. But can you see in the middle of the word is actually got a Y, so we need to remember to use the correct letter in the middle of the word and that's a Y. What letter goes in the middle tell me. Right. So this, the word stomach is particularly unusual, isn't it? Because it's got what sounds like a silent H at the end. So the word stomach we have to remember has A-C-H at the end, so don't forget that H. And then finally regurgitate. So regurgitate is slightly unusual in that, in the middle of the word, instead of the letter J which is what it sounds like we have the letter G, and we know that G is often used to make that sound. But what we have to remember is that there are two G's in this word. So at the start, it makes a G sound. And then in the middle of the word, it makes G sound. Okay, can you point to which one is the correct spelling of enzyme? Which one is it? Point to it, in three, two, one. It's the one spelt with a Y well done. Okay, which is the correct spelling of nectar, which is the correct one of nectar can you remember? and point to it in three, two, one. Well done everyone, it's the one spelt with an A-R at the end. I made a mistake. Have an I with a spelling of regurgitate. Can you spot which letter is wrong? Can you tell me, which one is wrong? Shout it out. Let's have a look. It shouldn't be a J in the middle. It should be a G in the middle to make that G sound. Oh, dear. I've made another mistake. I've got a letter missing from the word stomach. Can you call it out to me what letter have I got missing from the end, which one is it? Well done. It's H, so we need to remember there's an H at the end of the word stomach. So now we're going to think about the first section of our explanation texts so we've already done the introduction, and now we're going to be doing the first stages of the honey making process. So let's look at our plan now. You might want to get your plan and have a look at what you've included. So these are the stages that we're going to be writing about today. And I'm just going to recap the main things that I want to include. So, first of all, the bee goes and visits lots of different flowers. And remember, they have to feel nearly a thousand. They just have to visit many thousand flowers, to fill up their stomach, and they're searching for nectar. And there are particular colours that they're attracted to. And then next, we want to talk about the nectar being sucked up and getting into their crop stomach. And they have two crop stomachs. And that's where we want to use our clause or conjunctions are consequently as a result. And the nectar gets broken down in their tummies by the enzymes. And then we want to have them return into the hive and then regurgitating the honey into each other's mouth and repeating this process to get the honey thicker and thicker. So we have already looked at success criteria for an introduction remember. Success criteria is like a checklist to make our writing fantastic, to make it successful. And here is the success criteria for today's writing. So one, I have used causal and sequencing conjunctions. They should all be in your power, but let's just remind ourselves to sequencing conjunctions, like first, next, after half an hour and a causal conjunction like consequently, and as a result. And then two I've used technical language and synonyms. Synonyms words that mean the same thing as each other, like process or creatures. And then three expanded noun phrases. I have used expanded noun phrases, ENPs to add detail. And remember, those are those two adjectives separated by a comma that describe a noun. So colourful scented flowers would be an example of an expanded now phrase and we want to do all of those things in our writing. I've got my success criteria at the top of the screen. So let's check through this example. We're going to read an example and then see if we've got everything that we need to. I get to read it to you first. The honey making process is complex and each bee plays a vital role. First the worker bees leave the hive and diligently search for colourful scented flowers. The bees have fantastic colour vision, so they can easily locate flowers. They are particularly attracted to pink, purple and blue petals. Okay, so that's a first part of the process. If you're not quite sure what the word complex means, complex means quite complicated, it's not straightforward, it's not simple and easy and vital. If you play a vital role, that means that you are really important. Every bee is important in the way that the honey is made. So let's have a look at my first success criteria, which is I have used causal, and sequencing at conjunctions. And I can say that I have used the word First. So tick for me, well done, Mrs. Hardesty I've done my first success criteria. And then the second one remember was to use technical language and synonyms. And I have got the word process and colour vision, and locate to find something. So I've got my technical language and then my synonyms, instead of always using the word bee I've got the word creatures well done Mrs. Hardesty tick for number two. And now let's check for my third success criteria. So my ENP, my expanded noun phrase, and yes, I can see I've got colourful scented flowers. So my two adjectives with a comma well done Mrs. Hardesty I've got all three success criteria. So we've had a look at an example, and now it's time for us to do our own writing together. Right, I am going to now write the bit where the bee sucks up the nectar. So I'd like to start with a complex sentence and to do that I need a subordinate clause. I'm going to start with my subordinate clause with a when or an as, we're going to have when. When the bee lands on the flower. When the bee lands on a flower. And because I started with that, I therefore need a punctuation mark, what do I need? I need a comma. When the bee lands on a flower, it sucks the And I don't want to just right next, So want to use an expanded now phrase. So the sticky, transparent nectar. The sticky and then I need a comma again. Transparent nectar with what, with its long tongue. And I make sure that my word its doesn't have an apostrophe otherwise it would mean it is long tongue, and that wouldn't make sense. Okay, I'm going to read through to check. When the bee lands on a flower comma its sucks up the sticky, transparent nectar with its long tongue. Great. Now I can use a sequencing conjunction to do the next bit. So next comma, the nectar travels down into, and I've got to use a correct technical vocabulary. That the nectar travels down into the bee's and I'm going to use an apostrophe S to show possession. The bee's crop stomach. And I make sure that I spell it correctly with an H at the end. Let's see we've got a little error, so I'm just going to change it. Lovely, I'm going to read through to check next. Next the nectar travels down into the bee's crop stomach. And I want to explain what the crop stomach is. So this is the bee's second stomach where it stores, honey. This is the, instead of using the word bee, I've already used that twice, so I can use a synonym now. The insects, second stomach, where it stores nectar. Okay. And so now I want to try and use a cause and effect. So I want to talk about the enzymes and then breaking down the nectar into honey. So inside the crop stomach are enzymes that break down the nectar into honey. Can I see a, yes, I've got a little error there. So I'm just going to go back and check make sure it's written correctly. Okay, let me check through that sentence. Inside the crop stomach are enzymes that break down the nectar in the honey. And now I can use that causal conjunction. So as a result and it's getting thicker, isn't it? And it's becoming less transparent. It's turning a different colour. As a result, the liquid. So I've got a synonym and the liquid inside starts to change colour, and then I've got a full stop. And I wonder if I could add in enough fact about how many flowers it has to visit. So a bee needs to visit nearly how many was it? Can you remember what it was? A thousand that's right. Nearly one thousand. And I'm writing it as a word because this is not a math lesson so I need to write it as a word, not as digits in the number. A bee needs to visit any one thousand flowers to fill its stomach. Okay, I'm going to read through it now. When the bee lands on a flower comma, it sucks up the sticky, transparent nectar with its long tongue. Next, the nectar travels down into the bee's crop stomach full stop. This is the insect second stomach where it stores nectar. Inside the stomach are enzymes that break down the nectar into honey. As a result, the liquid inside starts to change colour. A bee needs to visit nearly one thousand flowers to fill its stomach. So you might want to pause a video now and write that first bit we've done together. My example, and the one that we've just written. or you might want to carry the video on until the end and then write everything at the end. So you might want to pause now so that you're doing your writing sections, or you might want to just carry on watching and then do all your writing at the end. So now we're getting onto the third picture, the last bit of the writing that we're going to do today. And I've already started it. So I've done one sentence and then we can carry on. So after the worker bee returns to the hive, comma it regurgitates the honey into the mouth of another bee. So I want to write another complex sentence about the honey stepping down into the tummy of the next bee and I'm going to start with as. So, as this happens, I want to talk about the enzymes again. The enzymes start to break the honey down in the crop stomach of which bee of the second bee. Let me just read through to check. As this happens, comma the enzymes start to break the honey down in the crop stomach of the second bee. And then what I want to write about how long this lasts. It's the half an hour, isn't it? So I'm going to start with after half an hour. After half an hour comma, and it's going to stop chewing, isn't it? And instead of bee cause I've already written bee. I'm going to write insects. The insect stops chewing the liquid and I'm going to extend it and then passes it on to another Bee. And passes it on to another bee. Let me just read through. After half an hour comma the insects stops chewing the liquid and passes it on to another bee. I want to add in an adverb here and should we have carefully or precisely, I think carefully. And carefully passes it on to another bee. And then I'm going to finish by writing about the fact that it happens over and over again. This process is repeated several times. Okay, let's read through to check. After the work the bee returns to the hive, comma it regurgitates the honey into the mouth of another bee. As this happens comma the enzymes start to break the honey down in the crop stomach of the second bee. After half an hour comma the insect stops chewing the liquid and carefully passes it onto another bee. This process is repeated several times. So this is your main task today. You need to write the first section of your honey making process of your explanation text. Getting to the bit where they regurgitate the honey into each other's mouth. So make sure you've got all of those different success criteria, the causal and the sequencing conjunctions, the technical language and synonyms and the expanded noun phrases the ENPs to add detail. So can you get your paper and pencil, pause the video and do your writing. Wonderful writing. Let's just check to make sure that you have got everything you need to in your writing. Again, you might want to do this in a different colour. You might want to take it off in your writing, but let's just check. Have you used causal and sequencing conjunctions? Look through your writing. Have you got first? Have you got a next? Have you gotten as a result, tick them off. Have you used some synonyms like creatures or insects tick them off. Technical language, like enzyme and stomach and nectar, making sure that they're spelled correctly as well, give yourself a tick. And then have you used any ENPs expanded noun phrases? So resourceful, intelligent creatures. If you have give yourself a tick, Let's have a recap of what we've done today. So we looked at our spelling practise. We made sure that we were spelling our technical vocabulary correctly, and we read an example of a brilliant start, and explanation text, and then you wrote your own. Absolutely amazing writing everyone. I am so impressed with all the fantastic work that you have done today. What amazing writers you are.

To write the first section of an explanation text

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