To write a story to show action (Part 3)

Early Years Foundation Stage

Literacy

The Giant Turnip

﻿Hello, everyone and welcome to your final lesson of the unit with me, Miss Gritty and Cedric. Wow, we are so proud of everyone aren't we, Cedric? You have become great storytellers throughout this unit. I can't wait to finish our writing today and see the end result. In today's lesson we will be finishing writing our story to show clear action. So, what will we do in today's lesson? Well, first we'll sing our nursery rhyme. Then, we'll recap the story quickly with our box plan and what we've already written. And then, we'll finish writing our story. For this lesson you will need you exercise book or a piece of paper, a pencil, your super memory and your teddy talk partner. You can pause the video here to go and get whatever you need and then press play once you've got them. First, it's time for our nursery rhyme. It's our final time singing our nursery rhyme, well, our version of the nursery rhyme, ten in the bed. And we sang, ♪ Ten people pulled the turnip and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Heave ho, heave ho, ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck... ♪ We could have a play around with the words so, we could say ten people pulled the farmer and the farmer said pull, pull. Let's try that one this time but we're down to nine now. ♪ Nine people pulled the farmer and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip ♪ ♪ But the turnip was stuck. ♪ Down to eight. ♪ Eight people pulled the turnip and farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck. ♪ Could we change the words again... ♪ Seven people pulled the farmer and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull? ♪ ♪ Seven people pulled the farmer and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck. ♪ Who came after the farmer? The wife! Six people pulled the wife. ♪ Six people pulled the wife and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck. ♪ Five... Got Jack. ♪ Five people pulled the turnip and the farmer said- ♪ Ooh. ♪ Five pulled Jack and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck. ♪ And after Jack comes Jill. ♪ Four people pulled Jill and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck. ♪ Three, the dog. ♪ Three people pulled the dog and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck. ♪ Two, the mouse, ♪ Two people pulled the mouse and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip but the turnip was stuck. ♪ ♪ One person pulled the turnip and the farmer said, ♪ ♪ Pull, pull! Pull, pull! ♪ ♪ So they all pulled the turnip and the turnip popped out! ♪ It's sometimes nice to play around with nursery rhymes and change the words. You can have a go at doing it by yourself later on. Okay children, now it's time to recap our story and read what we've written already in the last lesson. Here's our writing from the last lesson. I'll read it out first and then we can use our box plan to see where we are up to. Jack and Jill pulled the turnip but it did not budge. The dog and mouse heaved the turnip. So I'm looking on my box plan for the section with the dog and mouse and I can see them drawn here and then I can see that the action was pulling, I've used the word heaved, you might use something different. Happens next? Can you tell your teddy talk partner what this image shows, children? And these images here That's right, the turnip popped out of the ground and they all fell down. That's our next bit of action, and then the final bit of action that we'll be writing here. What's the final bit that happens? Can you shout it at your screen? Great work children! Mum chopped the turnip up for turnip stew and they had it for their tea. Now we know where we're up to with our box panel have a go at writing the next section of the story. But before we go any further, I'd like us to have a look at our star words, Now, we may or may not use these today but they are there if we need them. So I've got pulled, heaved, chopped, turnip. Can you say them with me this time? Pulled, heaved, chopped, turnip. Say them to teddy talk partner this time. Pulled, heaved, chopped, turnip. Great work everybody. And with high frequency words, we can't sound them out, we've just got to know them. I've got "it", "he", "is", "the", "they" and "mum". My turn "it", your turn. My turn "he", your turn. My turn "is", your turn. My turn "the", your turn. My turn "they", your turn. My turn "mum", your turn. Okay, let's remind ourselves of what a good sentence needs, can you show me five, can you tell your teddy talk partner the five things that our sentences need before we know that they're finished? Great, well lets go through them. Capital letters, finger spaces, using my phonics to check my spellings, full stops at the end of my sentence and then I can reread it at the end to check that it makes sense. Show me five. Okay so, let's write the next section of our story. The final section! You have done so well, guys, and we have done so much writing. So, let's have a look at my box plan at the bottom. Here, I can see that the turnip is popping out of the ground and I can also see that they fell down. So I think my first sentence needs to be The turnip popped out. I'm going to say it again. The turnip popped out. I've got my high frequency words at the bottom there and I've also got some of my keywords that I can use, my star words! If you're feeling confident enough, pause the video now and have a go at writing that sentence. Capital letter, "The turnip popped out" full stop. If you'd like to write along with me, you can carry on. Okay, "The" took from my keyword box. "turnip" which is also my keyword, my star word. "popped" P-O-P-P-E-D, popped! "out" O-U-T, out! Full stop. And remember, don't worry about the spellings of words as long as you use your phonics. Say the word, robot it, write it. Well done if you had a go at writing that sentence on your own. Let's have a look now at the next bit of our story. So, we've just written the sentence "The turnip popped out." I want to look at my box plan and see what the next section of the story is and that's here. What's the next action that I need to write about? Because we're focusing all on action. Well, they're falling down! I want us to put that into a sentence about the characters. You might use some of the words in the high frequency word box or star words but if you're feeling confident enough you can pause the video now and write the next sentence to describe the next action. If you feel like you want to stay with me that's fine too. Okay, so I'm going to think my sentence first and I want to say the sentence "they fell down" because that's the action that is happening. They fell down. They fell down. Now I'm going to say it with punctuation. Capital letter "They fell down" full stop. And then when I write the sentence I'm going to make sure I use my phonics. "They" which is in my high frequency word box. Fell. F-E-L-L, fell. Down. D-O-W-N, down. Let's have a look at what that looks like on the next slide. If you've got something different because you had a go on your own that's absolutely fine. We'll have a look at what that looks like now. The turnip popped out, they fell down. The turnip popped out, they fell down. What is my next action in the story? Well, let's have a quick look at my box plan if I can't remember. There's a turnip stew and here I've got the actions of mum chopping it up and that's one of my star words as well! Chopped! Can you write me a sentence that includes mum chopping up the turnip. And you might write mum chopped up the turnip. Remember, think your sentence first, say it twice, punctuate it and then write it and any words you need to sound out using your phonics make sure you use them. Pause the video here and have a go. Okay, let's see what that might look like. The turnip popped out. They fell down. Mum chopped up the turnip. "Mum" is my high frequency word. "chopped" is in my star keyword box. Mum chopped up U-P, up, the turnip which is also one of my star words. Full stop. And then, what happened after that? Well, they had it for their tea. If you want to write this on your own pause the video now but if you'd like to write this with me you can. Capital letter They had H-A-D, had, it for F-O-R their tea T-E-A, T-E-A, full stop. The turnip popped out. They fell down. Mum chopped up the turnip. They had it for their tea. Wow. I am so proud of all of you. Well done if you managed to write some of those sentences on your own. If you wanted to you might go back through your work with a different colour and add in some describing words. The giant turnip. Mum chopped it up into tiny pieces. What fantastic work, everybody. I am so proud. And here is our story all together! Cedric said please will we read it to me, he's been so looking forward to reading it! Are you ready, children? The farmer pulled the turnip. The turnip was stuck. He got his wife. They pulled and sang. Jack and Jill pulled the turnip but it did not budge. The dog and the mouse heaved the turnip. The turnip popped out. They fell down. Mum chopped the turnip. They had it for their tea. Wow, children. There's so much action going on in there! I can really, really tell what the characters are doing at each time. So much action, don't you agree Cedric? Oh Cedric said he's so proud of us. Well done, children! Wow, children. Thank you so much for being a storyteller with me and Cedric in this unit. There's so many things that you could be proud of yourself for. You might have listened to the story really well. You might have done some brilliant stepping or actions, dancing, singing. Or you might be really proud of your writing. Can you tell your teddy talk partner now one thing that you're really proud of yourself for in this unit? Can you say it in a full sentence? I am really proud of myself because... Me and Cedric have loved working on this unit with you and we are so proud of everything that you have done. Let's give ourselves a final cowboy cheer. Yee-haw! Don't forget, I love seeing all of your work so if you'd like to you can ask your parent or carer to share it. See you later, children!

To write a story to show action (Part 3)

To write a story to show action (Part 3)

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