To write a persuasive advert (Part 2)

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Persuasion: Buy my honey

﻿Hi everyone, My name is Miss Toole and I love to make up songs. So to start today, I would like to make the song that we use to warm up our voices for when we have to do our storytelling to make sure we've got nice, clear voices and everyone can hear us. So the only two sections of our song are, "Sticky honey and chocolate cake." So when I say, "Sticky honey," we go like this, and when I say chocolate cake, we rub our belly. So are you ready? Sticky honey, sticky honey, sticky honey, chocolate cake, chocolate cake, chocolate cake. Good. Did you join in at home? Let's have a go. So I'll stay stick honey. We do this. If we say chocolate cake, we do this. And I'm going to speed it up. So are you ready? Sticky honey, sticky honey, chocolate cake, chocolate cake, sticky honey, chocolate cake. Good. Now we put it to a song. So we might go... ♪ Sticky honey, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Sticky honey, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Sticky honey, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ And it's really hard to make sure you're definitely sayin' the words. Sometimes it can become a bit of a tongue twister. So see if you can join in just with those quick lyrics that are nice and simple. So are you ready? One, two, three. ♪ Sticky honey, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Sticky honey, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Sticky honey, sticky honey, ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake. ♪ All right, now we're going to have a go at mixing it up. So you need to listen and watch my actions, because I'm going to keep swapping between the two. So now it's going to go... ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ Did you join in with that pattern? Gosh, that's a bit difficult. Let's try again. One, two, three. ♪ Chocolate cake, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, sticky honey ♪ ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ Good. Now I'm just going to say the actions, and I want you to see if you can guess what my words are and the pattern. So are you ready? Did you get it? Let's see if we can do the words together. Sticky honey, chocolate cake, sticky honey, chocolate cake, sticky honey, chocolate cake, sticky honey, chocolate cake, sticky honey, chocolate cake, sticky honey, chocolate cake. Good. Right. Have a goal at home doing the actions and making up your own rhythms, and try not to get your tongue in a twist. Let's have a look at what we're going to be doing in today's lesson. We're going to start off by reviewing our persuasive advert from the previous lesson. We'll then going to continue our advert, looking at the three main reasons and the ending. And then we're going to retell our new persuasive advert orally, ready for the next lesson when we come to perform it. So today you're going to need exercise book and paper. You can get the same piece of paper you were using in the previous lesson, or you can get a fresh piece, that's fine, a pencil, and your amazing brain. So go and get your resources. And then when you come back, press play and we can start with today's learning. To start with, we're going to review our persuasive advert from the previous lesson. Now, I've got mine here. So if you want to go and grab yours to look at, you can do. We're going to read through it. And as we're reading through it, I want us to start to get into the role of the doctor trying to persuade them to buy the chocolate cake. I'm going to model it first. Then once I've done it, I would like you to pause and have a go at doing your own persuasive advert enrol. Once you've done that, we can carry on at explaining the reasons why they need to buy our chocolate cakes. Are we ready? Hello, everyone, my name is Dr. Tasty, and I am a chocolate cake baker. Every Friday I sell my chocolate cake at the baker's market. Roll up, roll up. Listen, everybody, come and buy my tasty cake. I can guarantee you won't get bellyache. I would like to take your money. Trust me. The cake is yummy. This is absolutely the best cake ever. And let me explain why you should buy it. Now, have a go then. Pause the video now, and recap the introduction to your persuasive map. Now that we've reviewed that persuasive at the introduction, we're going to move on to writing the next three main points and our ending. So, remember, our focus is taste, reputation, value, and then we've got our ending. So we're going to do the same as we've done it in the previous lesson of the unit. I will have a go at writing. You'll then pause the video, and I would like you to write at home. You can copy what I have done on the slide, or you can, same as yesterday, have a go at writing your own sentence, as long as you are following the structure of our persuasive advert. So let's start with our first point. So to help us to start, you're going to need your box from the previous lesson. And we're going to focus on taste, reputation, and value. So the first point is taste. The first way we're going to persuade them is focusing on their taste. So have this think about the chocolate cake and how you could persuade your reader to buy your chocolate cake. So holding your paper, pencil in your hand, we're going to start. The first word is first. And when we're doing the start, you need a capital letter. "First, it is," now, in the honey, we said it was delicious, but I would like you to think of a word to describe the chocolate cake that is different to delicious. So, "First, it is," think of a word. Full stop. So "First, it is," and think of your word. The next part in our honey persuasive is talking about how the bees live next to the field of roses. Why don't you think about why your chocolate cake might be magical? So we've got the chocolate, "The chocolate," and "The" is one of our tricky words. "The chocolate is made," Em, A, it's with a A. Duh. Made. "From," Now, chocolate's actually made from cocoa beans. We're going to put that in our persuasive advert. "From cocoa beans grown." Grown. Guh, rah, oh, we got the oh sound with an ah and a wah, neh. Grown. New line, "next to," and then I want you to have a think about what your cocoa beans are grown next to. So our honey bees were next to a field of roses. What is your cocoa beans going to be next to that makes your chocolate cake amazing? And then a full stop to end that sentence. Then linked to that, we have to say what our chocolate then tastes of. So, "My," which is one of our tricky words, M-Y, "My chocolate tastes of, My chocolate tastes of," and tell me what you think your chocolate is going to taste of based on wherever it has been grown. So for me, when I come to write mine, I going to do that my cocoa beans are grown next to an enchanted forest, and tastes of fairy dust. So my chocolate is going to taste like fairy dust from the enchanted forest, but you can think of what you needed to taste of. So pause the video now and have a go at doing the first section. We're now going to move on to the second section, which is the reputation. So think about why your chocolate cake has got a good reputation. So our sentence starts with second, capital letter. "Second, it is famous, Second, it is famous," So we want to think who are you going to want your reader to show that chocolate cake to. So, "Show it to," and I want you to fill in the blank when you come to write yours. "Show it to," it might be family. It might be friends. It might be other people at the market. "And they will," so in the honey, they will be impressed and respect you. So I want you think about what your reader's person will do. So when they buy the chocolate cake, what will their friends or their family do or be? And they will be jealous, be excited, be happy for you. So you fill out the blank for that one for me. So pause the video now and complete your sentence for the second part. We're now going to look at the third part, which is the value. The value. This is where we can sell it so they can get it for a good value. So, "Third," the start of your sentence, capital letter. "Third, it is great value." Full stop. "It is great value." Full stop. Remember your finger spaces between each word, and try and sound them out if you're not too sure how to spell them. "Third, it is great value." "You can," so full stop, capital letter. "You can," And then this is where you think about what you want to sell your cake. So you could either talk about, you can get one cake for a certain price and three cakes for the price, or, with it being in a cake, you can break into slices, so you can get one slice for certain price, but a whole cake for another price. So now have a go at writing the sentence for the third persuasive reason why, remember, you want to make it a really good deal, so that they want to buy your chocolate cake. Pause now and have go at writing your next sentence. We're now onto the final bit, where we give them two more reasons why they should buy. So, "Hurry now," and in our honey pot persuasive one it was, "Hurry now before it's all gone and you have to buy boring honey from the supermarket." So we want to think why do we want them to hurry. "Hurry now before," what are they going to miss? Full stop. "Hurry now before all the cake goes. Hurry now before everybody eats the slices. Hurry now before there is none left. Hurry now before," what do you want them to hurry for? "Hurry now before all the cake's gone, and you have to have a boring cake from a different shop." So I would like you to have it go now at finishing that sentence. "Hurry now before," tell me why I should buy your chocolate cake. Pause the video now to have a go. Now, we end our persuasive honey with a poem, that starts, "Buy now, buy now, buy now." And each word rhymes. We're going to do the same, but make it about chocolate cake. So we're going to start with buy now. So capital B, "Buy now. You won't feel dull." So I'm going to give you my rhyme I've used. And I've got everything to rhyme with the word dull. You can have a go at creating your own if you want. So, "Buy now, you won't feel dull." So that's my first word, dull. And, remember, the second line again starts with "Buy now." So, "Buy now," And this time I've gone for, "Buy now, you will definitely feel full." So, "Buy now, you will definitely feel full." So I've got dull and full. So the last word on my final line has to rhyme. So we got buy now, buy now. So it's going to be, "Buy now," and I've decided my last word's going to be mouthful. So it's going to be, "Buy now, and enjoy a mouthful." So you could have a go at creating your own, or if you'd like to, you can use the one that I have on the board. "Buy now and enjoy a mouthful." Now that you finished your persuasive advert, I want us to have go at retelling it orally. This gets us into role, ready for tomorrow when we're to preform our advert. So I will go, and then I'd like you to pause and have a go at home. So are we ready? Hello, everyone, my name is Dr. Tasty, and I am a chocolate cake baker. Every Friday I sell my chocolate cake at the Baker's market. Roll up, roll up, listen, everybody, come and buy my tasty cake. I can guarantee you won't get a bellyache. I would like to take your money. Trust me, the cake is yummy. This is absolutely the best cake ever. And let me explain why you should buy it. First, it is magical. The chocolate is made from cocoa beans grown next to an enchanted forest. My chocolate cake tastes of fairy dust. Second, it is famous. Show it to your family, and they'll be really envious. Third, it is great value. You can get one slice for three pounds, or a whole cake for 10 pounds. Hurry now before all the slices are gone, and you are stuck with a plain cake. Buy now, you won't feel dull. Buy now, you'll definitely feel full. Buy now and enjoy a mouthful. I really enjoyed telling my persuasive advert. And I would like for you to have a go now at doing it at home. So pause the tape, have a practise, and when you're ready press play again. I hope you've enjoyed writing your persuasive advert just as much as I have. And thank you for joining with me. Now, to finish today, we're going to do a song, and it's a chocolate cake song. So I go, you go, to learn words. Are you ready? It goes... ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Don't you just love my chocolate cake ♪ Let's do it again. ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Don't you just love my chocolate cake ♪ Good. And now we're going to do it in actions. We're going to go chocolate cake, chocolate cake, don't you just love my chocolate cake? So are you ready? I go then you go. ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Don't you just love my chocolate cake ♪ Good. Let's put it all together. One, two, three. ♪ Chocolate cake, chocolate cake ♪ ♪ Don't you just love my chocolate cake ♪ Amazing! Well done. In the next episode of this unit, we'll add the last bit onto our song as well. Thank you for today. See you later.

To write a persuasive advert (Part 2)

To write a persuasive advert (Part 2)

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