To write a created story about justice (Part 3)

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Jack and the Beanstalk: created story (characters, mood, problems)

﻿Hi there, my name is Miss Toole. And in today's lesson, we are going to be finishing our creative story. Now at the end of the last lesson, I asked you to think about a title for your new story. So I hope you've got that ready for today. We're going to start off with a spelling activity then we're going to recap our song for "Problems That Matter" because that is the focus when writing our story. We're going to finish our story and our shared write and then I'm going to give you some time to look back and edit your independent writing. So you're going to need an exercise book or a piece of paper, preferably with lines on. A pencil or a pen, and your amazing brain. You may also want to get your story from the previous lessons just so you can carry on and know where you are at. So bring along your fabulous self, pause now to go and get your resources, and then when you're ready to go press play. Our spelling focus has been the phoneme "ph". Can you say it out loud? "ph". Say it three times. "ph", "ph", "ph". Say it again. "ph", "ph", "ph". Super. I wonder can you remember any of the words that had our "ph" sound in? I'll give you a clue. We can draw it to measure things. That begins with a "gh" Gr-aph. Graph. Well done. Can you think of any others? One of our animals had a really long trunk and they have the "ph" sound. Ele-phant. well done. There's another animal that jumps around in the sea. A dol-phin. Dolphin. Fantastic. And something that we need to learn when we are little to help us with our spellings, we can have our alpha-bet. Super. So, on the slide, I have the six words we were focusing on. Graph. Phone, dolphin, alphabet, phantom and elephant. Your activity today is to write sentences with each of our words in. So I'm going to give you a few examples, but then I would like you to pause and have a go writing your own sentences. Now when we are sentence writing, we need a capital letter at the beginning and a full stop at the end. And in between each word, we need to have a finger spaces. So I'm going to start my sentence and my sentence is going to be, "The dolphin jumped high into the air." So "The" capital letter, dolphin, dol-phin, dolphin, jumped hi-gh, "I" trigraph "I" high into the air. Full stop. That's one of my sentences. My next sentence is going to be, "The Phantom hid behind the door." The pha-ntom hid behind the, tricky word T-H-E, the door. Full stop. So now I want you to have a go. They are asked six words on the slide. You can challenge yourself to write six sentences one for each, but I would at least like you to do two. So if you want to just do two, that's fine. If you want to challenge yourself and do more than two, feel free. But the biggest challenge is to write six sentences, each one having a different one of our words off the screen. Off you go. Before we finish our creative story, I want us recap problem that matters because that was our focus of our creative story. And we needed to make sure our problem matters when writing it down. Now we had a problem that matters toolkit. We needed to make sure our problem was hard to solve for our main character. We needed to make sure that our reader felt through our main character and wanted them to succeed. We also needed to make sure that when we were writing, we included thoughts of the characters, feelings of our main character and their actions in order to solve the problem. And we created a song to help us remember that. So I'm going to sing now and then you can join in with me, or if you'd like to, you can pause and then sing your own version. Will just help us when we come to write our story. So are we ready? ♪ I've got a problem I care about ♪ ♪ I've got a problem I care about ♪ ♪ I've got a problem I care about ♪ ♪ Someone stole my treasure map ♪ ♪ Captain Stamford up stole the map ♪ ♪ Captain Stamford stole the map ♪ ♪ Captain Stamford stole the map ♪ ♪ And hid it in his pocket ♪ ♪ I can't find Captain Stamford ♪ ♪ I can't find Captain Stamford ♪ ♪ I can't find Captain Stamford ♪ ♪ What I'm I going to do now ♪ ♪ How will I get my map back ♪ ♪ How will I get my map back ♪ ♪ How will I get my map back ♪ ♪ I'm really upset now ♪ ♪ I'm feeling determined ♪ ♪ I'm feeling determined ♪ ♪ I'm feeling determined. ♪ ♪ I'm going to get my map back ♪ Have a go singing yours as if you did it with me then, and then we can start to write the end of our story. The next part of our story was that we need to write is the solution. How do we solve the problem? Now on my bottom, my solution is another character. So the parrot comes to help Pirate Pete. And Pirate Pete then feels happy. So it's a happy solution for me. Remember your solution maybe another character. Or we talked about that feeling inside, you might decide to feel brave or courageous and that's how your character solves their problem. So you're going to need your story from the previous lessons, a pencil and your paper, and then we're going to carry on writing the rest of our story. So as I just said for me my solution is the parrot coming to help Pirate Pete. So I ended my problem with, "What am I going to do?" He thought. So I'm going to start my next sentence with the words "All of a sudden," because Pirate Pete was deep in thought and I'm going to outline the part parrot, came from nowhere and Pirate Pete wasn't expecting it. So my sentence opener is all of a sudden, four words. All of a sudden. And we are starting with a capital letter. All of, all of a sudden. But all of a sudden what happens? A parrot landed on Pirate Pete's shoulder. A parrot landed on Pirate Pete's shoulder. Seven words. All of a sudden, a parrot, parrot land, landed, that's suffix "Ed" again, landed on, remember Pirate Pete is his name so it's a capital letter. Pirate, Pete's shoulder. End of our sentence, full stop. All of a sudden a parrot landed on Pirate Pete's shoulder. What did the parrot do to help is what I now need to think. The parrot said he was going to distract the pirates. So, the parrot said he would distract the pirates. Eight words. This is now, how my problem starts to get solved. The, tricky word T-H-E, starts of the sentence so it needs a capital letter after that of full stop. The parrot, tricky word said S-A-I-D. The parrot said he would, W-O-U-L-D. Tricky word. He would distract, di-s-tract, distract tricky word, the pirates. So he said he's going to distract the pirates. So that's how it starts to solve. So now what's my character going to do to get his treasure map back. You ready? The parrot started to squawk and Pirate Pete took the map back. And that is how my problem was solved. The parrot started to squawk and Pirate Pete took the map back. 12 words. It's quite long sentence for this one so we are going to do it in sections. So we've got a full stop there so it's a capital letter. The parrot started star-ted, suffix "Ed". Started, two tricky words T-O, squawk and Pirate Pete took the map back. The parrot started to squawk and Pirate Pete went, oh, we are going to change, let's change took to went to get the map. That's me editing mine. The parrot started to squawk and Pirate Pete went to get the map. Went to get them map. So and Pirate capital letter Pete went to, tricky word, get get, tricky word there T-H-E, the map. End of the sentence full stop. And did you know sometimes when you're writing your sentence down, you might do the same as me and edit what you're going to write. Cause you might think of a better idea, or realise it doesn't make sense so you want to change some of your work. So let's read it back. All of a sudden a parrot landed on Pirate Pete's shoulder. The parrot said he would destruct the pirates. The parrot started to squawk and Pirate Pete went to get the map. Perfect. That's my solution. Pirate Pete has got his map. So pause the video now and have a go writing your solution. Now that you've got your solution, we're going to move on to our ending. So for me, my ending is when Pirate Pete and the parrot, get away and find the treasure. So think about what your ending is. Have you got a happy ending? Or have you got a sad ending? So Pirate Pete went to get the map. So my next thing is I need to get Pirate Pete and the parrot away from the pirates. So my sentence is going to be, Pirate Pete and the parrot got away as fast as they could. 12 words. Starting with a capital letter. Pirate Pete and, tricky word there T-H-E, the parrot, Pirate Pete and the parrot got away as fast as they could. Tricky word, C-O-U-L-D, could. Full stop, end of my sentence. Now we've got to decide where my treasure chest is going to be. Although I still remember I said it was near palm tree where they find a red axe. So my sentence is going to be, they stopped at a palm tree and saw a red cross. Eleven words. They stopped at a palm tree and saw a red cross. Okay? So they, capital to start my sentence, T-H-E-Y, they stopped, suffix E-D. Stopped at a palm tree. They stopped at a palm tree and, So I'm adding a little bit more of a And, and, saw a red, red cross. Full stop. They stopped at a palm a tree and saw a red cross. So in mine I said this is where the treasure was going to be. So Pirate Pete, started to dig down and found the treasure chest. Pirate Pete started to dig down and found the treasure chest. 11 words, again. So Pirate Pete, remember it's his name so use capital letter. Pirate Pete started to, tricky word, T-O to dig dig down and, and found, Pirate Pete started to dig down and found the treasure chest. This is my happy ending because he found the treasure chest. And to make it even happier, I'm going to put that Pirate Pete and the parrot became the best of friends. Cause if you remember at the beginning of our story, I talked about how Pirate Pete was all on his own. Just gives a little extra happy ending on to our story. So Pirate Pete became best of friends with the parrot. Nine words. Pirate, capital letter, his name, Pirate Peter became best, best of, tricky word, O-F, best of friends, with the parrot. And there we go. I have finished my created story. So you have a go now in writing your ending onto your solution. So I'll go back and read mine. Pirate Pete and the parrot got away as fast as they could. They stopped at a palm tree and saw a red cross. Pirate Pete started to dig down and found the treasure chest. Pirate Pete became best of friends with the parrot. Have a go now writing your ending to your story. Now that you've finished writing your story, It's time for us to step edit our writing. I'm going back to our five finger editor. So capital letters, finger spaces, spellings, full stops and checking it makes sense. I'm going to read through mine and I will think about it. And then I'd like you to do the same with yours. So are we ready? On an Island far far away, there lived a young pirate called Pirate Pete. Pirate Pete's family and friends all died while saving the seven seas. All that remained, was Pirate Pete's father treasure map. One stormy night, Captain Stamford and his crew arrived on the Island. They stole Pirate Pete's treasure map. Pirate Pete was sad. Pirate Pete searched for the pirates. He found footprints that led to a cave. There he saw the map sticking out of Captain Stamford's jacket. "What am I going to do?" He thought. All of a sudden a parrot landed on Private Pete's shoulder. The parrot said he would distract the pirates. The parrot started to squawk and Private Pete went to get the map. I'm still not sure about this sentence. So I think I'm going to edit it so that it makes a little bit more sense. So I'm going to say the parrot started to squawk so Pirate Pete went to get the map. So I'm going to change the word "And" to the word "So". So we're going to change this 'and' here. All I have to do is put a line through it, and above it would we just write the word "so". So Pirate Pete went to get the map. Oh that is much better. Pirate Pete and the parrot got away as fast as they could. They stopped at the palm tree and saw a red cross. Pirate Pete started to dig down and found the treasure chest. Private Pete became best of friends with the parrot. So I've edited my writing. I want you to have a go, using our five finger editor to check your writing. Did you enjoy writing your very own story all about justice? So for me, my Pirate Pete got justice against those mean pirates that stole his treasure map. And he got his treasure map back. And he even managed to find the treasure that he had been searching for. So I am really proud of my story. And I hope you are proud of your story too. I wonder if somebody in your house would like to listen to your story, cause I bet they are just as proud as me. Now that you have a finished story, there are a few activities that you can do if you want to do a little bit more work. You could draw some pictures to match each part of your story, and you can put a bit more detail than what we put in our box in our story map. You could do a full cover for your story now that you have decided your title. Or if you found it a new challenge, you now have all the tools to create a story. So you can have a go at writing your very own story all on your own and you can have a think about a different problem. So rather than being something being stolen, you might change the problem completely and then focus on your problem that matters a different way. So well done for all your work in this unit. It has been amazing. Let's give ourselves a firework hooray. Hooray! As we celebrate our success.

To write a created story about justice (Part 3)

To write a created story about justice (Part 3)

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UnitEnglish / Jack and the Beanstalk: created story (characters, mood, problems)

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