To show not tell how a character is feeling

Key Stage 1

English

The Unlucky Man

﻿In today's lesson, we are going to be using the four different sentence types to write diary entries in role as some of the other characters in the story, revealing their thoughts and feelings about the unlucky man. I'm going to show you mine in role as the lovely young woman, and then you're going to choose whether you would like to do yours in role as the tree or the wolf. So let me show you how that learning is going to look today. First, we are going to do a grammar recap on sentence types. After that, we are going to recap our songs and interviews in role as the other characters. Then we're going to read and discuss my diary entry. And finally, you are going to write your own diary, in role as the tree or the wolf. It's going to be your choice. So in today's lesson, you will need something to write on, an exercise book or a piece of paper, and a pen or pencil to write with. So pause the video now and go and get those things if you need to. Fantastic, you are back with everything you need to start the learning today. Now then, let's start with a recap on our sentence types. I know that you've learned about bees in other units. So today, we're just going to do a quick recap. Now then, this is the activity. You can see in that really colourful table on your screen that all of the four sentence types have been jumbled up. So they are not color-coded in that table. You can see down the right-hand side of your screen underneath my picture are the four different sentence types. You've got commands, exclamations, statements, and questions. Now, in those boxes, they are colour coded, aren't they. Commands are in pink, exclamations are in green, statements in dark blue, and questions in light blue. But in the table, that's not how it works. They are all jumbled up. So the colours do not match. So on your piece of paper, I would like you to write the four different sentence types as headings. So commands, explanations, statements, questions. And then underneath each heading, you are going to write the correct sentences from the table. So pause the video now and have a go at that. Well done. Great effort. Now, shall we see how you got on? Let's take the first one, shall we? The first sentence in the table. "This mountain is very steep." "This mountain is very steep." What kind of sentence is that? And how do you know? Go and tell me your screen now. Say, "That is a mm. I know because." Tell me now. Brilliant job. Lots of really hard thinking today. I'm very impressed. So, "This mountain is very steep" is a statement. And we know because it's a piece of information, and it ends in a full stop. So the piece of information is that the mountain is steep. And we know that all statements ending full stops. Brilliant job. Should we ever look at the rest of them? So let's look at commands first. You should have two command sentences written down under that heading. The first one, "Dig up the treasure beneath my roots," and "Look around you to find your luck," said by the tree and the wise man from our story. Now, how do we know that those are commands? How do we know? Say, "I know those are commands because." Tell me now. Brilliant. Well done. You know your stuff. So those are commands, because they tell somebody to do something. And a big clue is that they start with imperative verbs. So most commands start with imperative verbs. And here, we have "dig up" and "look." So those sentences are commands because they tell somebody to do something. Commands end in full stops as well, don't they? Now, let's take a look at the statements. So we have, "This mountain is very steep." We've done that one together. "I need to get home and find my luck." "My job is so boring." "The young woman smiled and waved." So go on, remind me, how do we know that those are statements? Tell your screen now. Say, "I know those are statements because." Tell your screen. Well done. Well remembered. So we know their statements because they tell us a piece of information and they end in a full stop, don't they. Fantastic. Now, let's look at questions. So you should have three questions. "Why am I so sad and lonely?" "How can I find my luck?" "What will I do if I don't find a meal soon?" All said by different characters in our story. The lovely young woman, the unlucky man, and then finally the wolf. So, how do we know that those are questions? Go on, tell me now. "I know there's a questions because." Tell your screen. Fantastic. Again, really hard thinking. I am impressed. So we know those are questions because we want an answer to them, don't we? Whenever we ask a question, we know that we're looking for an answer. They all end in a question mark, and they start with question words. Why, how, what. So that tells us what a question is. And finally exclamations. How do we know that these. Let's read them first. "How unlucky I am!" "What a fool!" "What a wise man to give me such great advice!" How do we know that those are exclamations? Tell me in a full sentence. "Those are exclamations because." Tell your screen. Again, brilliant job. I'm very, very impressed with you today. So we know that those are exclamations because they start in how or what, they end in an exclamation mark, and they show strong feeling, don't they? So, "How unlucky I am!" starts with how, shows strong feeling. He's really just grumpy about it, isn't he? And ends at an exclamation mark. "What a fool!" starts with what, ends in an exclamation mark, and again, shows strong feeling. They just are not impressed with him at all. They're angry and upset with him, disappointed, aren't they? Disappointed in him. So those are our four different sentence types, commands, statements, questions, and exclamations. And we are going to be using all of them today in our diary entry. So we're going to be using those four different sentence types in our writing today to write our diary entry in role as one of the other characters. But before we explore the diary entry, let's just remind ourselves what those characters thought about the unlucky man and how they felt about him by singing our song and doing a quick interview recap from Lesson 3. So to help us get into role for writing our diary entries today, let's first step into the shoes of the lovely young woman and sing her song, showing what she thinks and feels about the unlucky man. And try and get her feelings across through your use of voice and your facial expressions when you sing the song. Okay. I know, you know it really well by now. So join in with me. Ready? ♪ What a foolish man ♪ ♪ I offered him my hand ♪ ♪ Why did he run away? ♪ ♪ I cannot understand ♪ Great job. So there you have her song showing her confusion, her disappointment in him, her anger, her sense of rejection. She feels unwanted, doesn't she, by him. He just ignored her when she offered to marry him. I mean, what a fool she thinks he is. So that's her song. Now, let's recap her TV interview to find out what she thinks and feels about him in a bit more depth.

Lovely young woman, welcome to the show. Thank you. Thanks for having me.

First, tell me, how did you meet the unlucky man?

Well, I first him when he was climbing the mountain on his way to meet the wise man to ask why he didn't have any luck.

I see. And what happened on this first meeting?

I asked him to find out from the wise man why I was so sad and lonely.

I see. And can you tell me, what were your first impressions of the unlucky man at that meeting? What did you first think of him?

Well, at first I thought he seemed rather nice. In fact, I thought he was quite handsome, and I was looking forward to talking to him. But when I asked him about my problem, when I asked him to help me, he just seemed quite impatient and a bit rude to be honest. He seemed in a hurry just to get to the top and solve his own problem.

Hmm. And what about the second time when you met him coming down the mountain? What did you think about him then?

Well, that time I was totally unimpressed. I just thought he was a real fool. I offered him my hand in marriage. I asked him to marry me, and he just threw it right back in my face. I couldn't believe it. All that time, he'd been moaning on and on about how he was so lonely, how he'd never get married. And then I offer my hand in marriage, and he doesn't want it. I mean, I'm kind, I'm thoughtful, I'm lovely. He could have been so happy with me. But no, all he cared about was getting down that mountain to find his luck. Well, in the end, he didn't have any luck, did he? Serves him right I think.

Okay, so now we have recapped the thoughts and feelings of the lovely young woman towards the unlucky man. We are ready to read her diary entry. But first, what's the point of a diary entry? Why do we write them? What's the purpose of them? We write diary entries to try and make sense of our experiences, to try and make sense of what's happened to us and our thoughts and feelings about it. And so we're going to explore that now in the diary entry of the lovely young woman. How is she trying to make sense of her meeting with the unlucky man in what she's written? So let's have a read of it together. "Dear diary, "What a fool that man is! "I offered to marry him, and he turned me down. "Didn't he always moan about how lonely he was? "Didn't he always moan about how much he wanted a wife? "Well, I was a great solution. "Surely, marrying me was the lucky break he longed for. "Am I not a great catch for him? "I am young and lovely and kind. "What luck to marry a woman like me! "He just threw my fantastic offer back in my face. "In fact, not only did he turn me down, "but he took absolutely no notice of me. "How rude! "'Get some better manners and go away then,' I thought. "I have never met such a thoughtless, selfish, "foolish man in my life, and I'm sure I never will again. So there is the diary entry in role as the lovely young woman showing what she thinks and feels about the unlucky man. Now, let's unpick this in a bit more detail, thinking about our four sentence types. So first, I would like you to try and spot the four sentence types in my diary entry. Can you underline each one in a different colour? And after you've done that, we're going to talk about the effects of them. We're going to talk about why those four sentence types are really useful in diary entries. So pause the video now and underline each of those sentence types that you can find in my diary entry. Okay. Let's see how you got on. I know that you know the four sentence types really well by now. So, let's have a look. Well, in green, what kind of sentences have we got in green? Go on, tell me to your screen now. "The sentences in green are mm." Fantastic. Those are exclamations, aren't they? So, "What a fool that man is!" "What luck to marry a woman like me!" They both start with "what," they both show really strong feeling, don't they, and they've got exclamation marks on the end. So when she says, "What a fool that man is!" she is showing her anger and her disappointment. And then when she says, "What luck to marry a woman like me!" she feels really strongly that she is just a great catch for any man, doesn't she? She feels like she's really kind of celebrating herself there. Power to her. And then on this page, we have the exclamation, "How rude!" Again, showing her feelings towards him. She thinks he is rude. So those are our exclamations showing her feelings. Now, let's have a look at some of the questions. Which are in? Go on, which colour are the questions in? They are in purple, aren't they? "Didn't he always moan about how lonely he was? "Didn't he always moan about how much he wanted a wife?" So those are the questions. And what effect do they have? Oh, there's another one I missed. "Am I might not a great catch for him?" So those questions really show her confusion, don't they. She's thinking, "Well, he was always moaning "about how lonely he was, how much he wanted a wife. "And there I was, offering him just that. "And he didn't want it. "Am I not a great catch for him?" She's confused as to why he would turn her down. So the questions show her confusion. And then we've got statements, haven't we? In, what colour are the statements in? Go and tell me now. Those were in blue, aren't they. Well done. "I offered to marry him, and he turned me down." "I was a great solution. "Surely, marrying me was the lucky break he longed for." "I am young and lovely and kind." So those statements do two things. They say what happened. So the first statement there, "I offered to marry him, and he turned me down." That statement is giving the reader information about what happened. And then, "Surely, marrying me "was the lucky break he longed for." "I am young and lovely and kind." Those statements are adding more descriptive detail, aren't they, about her thoughts and feelings. Now let's have a look at the statements on this page. "He just threw my fantastic offer back in my face. "In fact, not only did he turn me down, "but he took absolutely no notice of me." And again, those statements there are telling us what's happened, aren't they? "I have never met such a thoughtless, selfish, "foolish man in my life, and I'm sure I never will again." That final statement is telling us more detail, more information, about what she thought about him. Now, we've got one command in this piece, haven't we? Did you spot it? It's in pink, isn't it? "Get some better manners and go away then." Now then, that is a command. Even though she doesn't say it to him directly, that's what she's thinking. "'Get some better manners and go away then,' I thought. So in her head she was telling him, "Get some better manners and go away then." So there's our imperative verb at the beginning, "get." And then there's another one, isn't there. "Go away." So she's so unimpressed with him that that is what she's thinking. That's the command in her head. Now, we've already talked about it a little bit, but let's just recap why the four sentence types are so useful for diary entries. Now, we know the purpose of diary entries is to show thoughts and feelings about what's happened. So, let's look at the effect of the four sentence types in helping us to achieve that. So questions show a character's confusion. Exclamations show a character's strong feelings, for example, anger or disappointment. Statements give information, either about what happened, or they might add some extra descriptive detail about what a character thinks or feels. And finally, commands show what the character wanted. So the four sentence types really help us to show characters' thoughts and feelings about what has happened to them. And then finally, with diary entries, we always write them in the first person, don't we? Because we're writing in role as the character. So we need to use I, my, and me. So I want you to think about that toolkit. Really try and use it when you come to write your own diary entry now as a character of your choice. And so, that is what you're going to do. You are now going to choose whether you would like to take on the role of the tree or the wolf in the story, and write a diary entry in role as that character, showing what happened and their thoughts and feelings about their meeting with the unlucky man. So if you would like to do the tree, then following on from this, you can recap the interview with the tree from Lesson 3. I've included that in this video to help you. If you would like to do the wolf, we didn't do a song or an interview for the wolf, did we? So that's a bit more of an independent challenge for you. So if you would like to write in role as the tree today, here is the TV interview with the tree as a recap to help you. If you would like to write in role as the wolf though, you might choose to skip this part of the video and move on to the independent task. However, even if you want to write in role as the wolf, it might help you also to listen to the interview with the tree again.

Thank you for having me on the show. I'm ready to hear your first question. Off you go. Hmm. How did we first meet? Okay. Well, same as the young woman, really. So I met him as he was climbing up the mountain on his way to ask the wise man why he didn't have any luck. Go on. Second question. I'm ready. Mm-hmm, mm-hmm, okay. What happened when we met? Well, I asked him to find out from the wise man why I was so thin and leafless. Go on, third question, I'm ready. Mm-hmm. Mm. Right. My first impressions of him. Well, were not good, to be honest. I mean, there I was asking him to help me solve a problem, and he just didn't seem to care. Wasn't bothered. Just wanted to get up to the top of the mountain and solve his own problem, to be honest. A bit impatient, I thought. Next question, I'm ready. Hmm. Hmm. The second time we met, even worse, to be honest. Wasn't impressed by him at all. I mean, the man had been moaning and moaning constantly about how unlucky he was, how he didn't have any money. And you know, I offered him the buried treasure under my roots. I offered him a whole chest of buried treasure. And was he interested? No. Honestly, ridiculous. Just wanted to get home to find his luck. Well, there it was being offered to him on a plate right in front of his face. Didn't even notice. Honestly, what a fool. Go on, next question. Ready again. Hmm. Okay. What advice would I give him if I met him a second time? Well, I mean, where do you start with someone like that? I would tell him that he needs to look at what is right in front of his nose. I mean, goodness me. He could have had all the luck in the world. I was offering him everything he ever wanted. But just totally ignored it. Totally didn't notice. I mean, what's a foolish man, that's all I can say.

So here is your independent task today. As I said, it's now going to be your choice to write your own diary entry in role as either the tree or the wolf, showing your thoughts and feelings about what happened when you met the unlucky man. So there is your toolkit in purple. Those are the things that I would like you to use in your diary entry. And in the green box, you have some exclamation sentence openers. So remember, exclamations start in what or how. So, pause the video now and have a go at writing your diary entry in role as your choice of character. Now, I would absolutely love to read your creative diary entries in role as either the tree or the wolf. So if you would like to, please ask your parents or carer to share your work on Instagram, Facebook, or Twitter, tagging @OakNational, @KateEBarron, and hashtag #LearnwithOak. I really am excited to read what you have written. Now that brings us to the end of our learning today. I hope that you've enjoyed the lesson. I wonder what your favourite moment was. Can you tell me in a full sentence? "My favourite moment was." Go on, tell your screen. Great. Great to hear your favourite moment. My favourite moment was, ooh, I think my favourite moment was reading my diary entry in role as the lovely young woman. I really enjoyed doing that. I love bringing out a character's thoughts and feelings in my writing. So I will see you in Lesson 5, in the next lesson. So until then, keep singing your story songs, keep telling the story of the unlucky man, and keep doing some creative writing around the story. There's all sorts of different things that you can do with it that we don't have time to cover in this unit. So any other writing that you would like to do, I would also love to read, and you could also share that with me. But for now, I'm going to say goodbye. Bye.

To show not tell how a character is feeling

To show not tell how a character is feeling

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