To continue to write the opening with speech

Key Stage 2

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The Happy Prince - Narrative Writing

﻿Hello again, this lesson we're going to be embedding what we know about speech in the next. This is the last part of our opening. So we're going to be using our speech skills to write this last bit of our opening. And then after that, we'll go on to the buildup, but this is the last bit of when the prince and the bird are making friends. Okay. That's good. Let's look at what we're doing. We have our warmup first of all Then we're going to have a reminder of how we lay out speech. Then we're going to do a shared right, including speech. And then we need to remember to check our work. So you will need an exercise book or some paper, a pencil or pen, and your notes from the previous lesson that will help you. If you don't have those things, pause the video and go and get those things now. Okay, here's our warmup. Let's remember our speech punctuation. Cause we're going to be using it in our writing today. What are these called again? Shout it to me, three, two, one. Yep speech marks, or they could also be called, Can anyone remember? You think, inverted commas, either is fine. So I want you to be the teacher just now. I want you to tell me what's missing from my speech punctuation or what is wrong? op, what's wrong, what's wrong with this? I would like you to pause and check. So the first thing I can see I've got right to check against the speech sandwich. I want you to pause. You don't need to write anything down. Just tell me what's right, and what's wrong. Pause now and have a look. Okay, let's check together. So I had, first of all, a thumbs up for my first speech marks. So I've got the first bits of bread, but then you can see my little circle of shame here. I've got a missing capital letter, easily done, but let's just try and make sure they're there. So that's the beginning of my sentence in my speech. I need a capital letter. So that w needs to change to a big w, there it is much better. What else can you point to anything else that's missing "What's wrong?" asked the Sparrow. how can we tell where the speech ends? It doesn't end there does it, cause the sparrow, didn't say all of those things. "What's wrong asked the Sparrow." asked the Sparrow Doesn't make sense. Okay. Let's see. We've got a capital W there, well done. We've got open speech marks there. Those speech marks are in the wrong place. They haven't gone where the speech, where the actual talking ends. So where does the actual talking end? "What's wrong?" asked the Sparrow. So it's before the said word it's what's wrong. So it's at the end there. So I put my speech marks in there. Did you get that really well done Okay. Don't worry if you didn't, we're working on it. So then we've got something else missing. We'd miss our tomato there. We've got our capital letter at the beginning. Then we haven't got that strange that w now looks like a small w to me it should be a big w at the beginning of whats So, but we're also missing our tomato. So what's wrong. Is a, is it a exclamation or is it a, it's a question. So we need to have a, tell me question mark. That's right. Question mark. Inside those speech marks. Anything else? Can you go along? Comes next? We've got our magical shield, but something seems to have not worked. What can we spot? I'm trying hard. Thank you for your help. It's easy to make these mistakes, but we are keeping on going to get it right. It should not be a catalytic cause we've got the magical shield of the close speech marks. And so this should be a lower case m. Great getting better. Anything else? What's wrong? You still got that. W that is a lower case, when it should be an upper case. Sorry about that. "What's wrong?" asked the Sparrow. Yeah, that's right now. We've got our full stop at the end. That's good. We've got our S for sparrow as a capital letter, cause it's the name of one of our characters. Thank you so much for your help on that. Let's have a look at how we lay out speech. So we've got our speech punctuation, but there's also particular rules about how you lay it out on your page. So what it looks like on the page, "when we use speech, we must remember four things," said Ms.Waddell. We must remember our speech sandwich, got that, said or synonym for said plus who said it, me in this case, a full stop at the end. And you can see that rule there and a new line when a new person is talking. And if you did the Aladdin unit with me before, we will have practised this already but if you didn't, this is a new thing for you. So speech lab, we need to start a new line every time. A new person speaks. So "what's wrong?" ask the Sparrow, that's the sparrow talking and we've got another person talking. So we start a new line. "I lived in luxury in, a palace with huge walls," cried the Prince, and then we've got another new person talking, "but why are you, now sad?" question the little bird. So each person a new each time, sorry, a new person talks. We have to start a new line, even if that line is not quite finished yet. So we need to remember that for when we're writing in a moment and now we're going to have it go, at a shared write. Okay. So we are going to use our success criteria. So we need to use the speech sandwich. We need to use synonyms for said and who said it? And we need to remember a new speaker, new line. We've got the speech sandwich there to help us remember. The first person to speak is the bird. And he asks, what does he ask? He asks "Why are you crying?" good so far? no, it's not well done. We need to start with our speech facts Why are you crying? So we've got our beginning bit of the sandwich, open speech marks, capital letter tomato. Why are you crying? And we need our other tomato. Don't we? And it's a question. So we'll have a question mark. Why are you crying? Who says it? It's the bird but we need to indicate, he's finished talking so close speech marks. Why are you crying synonym for said, with a question we had, could you tell me, asked? Yeah, we could do ask or we could do I think I might do inquired, inquired the bird now inquired I have remembered that, that is not a capital letter because it is blocked by the speech mark. So inquired the bird. But I think, I quite like to maybe say what the bird was like. So inquired, the I'm going to describe him. He's a bit concern. So you've described the concern and than I put my full stop right at the end. Why are you crying? Inquired the concerned bird. So now we've got another person speaking, so we need to start a new line. So I'm going to go down onto the next line. So the next person to speak and its the speaking person, it is the Prince. The Prince says, what does he talk about? He says that he was once a happy Prince in the palace. "I was once a happy prince in a palace surrounded by luxury and lots of lovely things. Now I haven't put the capitals but, because its the name of the character, the happy Prince, I'm going to put it in capitals Surrounded by luxury. Oh, stop. He carries on, doesn't he, I had everything I ever wanted add a Conjunction, comma, but I didn't think about anyone else So that's when he finishes talking. So what do I need right after the speech? So I got to the end of my cheese. What do I need? Do I need a question mark here? Is it a question? I had everything i wanted. No, it's not question It's not a full stop. It's not an exclamation. It's a comma. Pro speech mark bread. How did he say it? I need to say, well, what could it be? Could be cried. That's a good one. Or it could be wept. Wept the prince. full stop at the end. Okay. We'll have a look at that together. Okay. So here, I've highlighted the key bits of my speech punctuation to make sure it's correct. Why are you crying inquired I got my 66, my capital letter. So 66 bread, capital letter, tomato, speech. Why are you crying? Other tomato question mark bread, speech marks inquired the concerned bird. Then new speaker new line. I was once happy Prince in a palace, surrounded by luxury. I had everything I ever wanted comma, but I didn't think about anyone else. Comma close speech marks wept the prince full stop. So I've used my speech sandwich. I've used synonyms for said inquired and wept And I've used this new speaker, new line. Thanks for your help. Okay. Let's have a look at the next bit. So we want to extend, to say you remember when we were looking at how people convey, what they want to their feelings or what they want to say, they use their body like I'm using as well as what they say and their facial expressions and how they said. So I want to see if, if you can extend it to show what someone does at the same time. Don't worry. If you want to stop there, that's fine. But this is if you want to go a little bit further. So here we've got, why are you crying inquired the concern bird I want you to add an as. So a relative clause at the end of this, as he, what did he do? As he, as he perched on the statutes shoulder, it could be, as he looked up into his sad eyes, it could be, can you think of a centre, a second part of the sentence to finish that using as, say it aloud when you think you've got it. I'll listen Good. Okay. Let's try the next one. I was once a happy Prince in a palace, surrounded by luxury. I had everything I ever wanted, but I didn't think about anyone else. Wept the Prince As, as So just say that last bit for me. Ready? Go. Fantastic for giving it a go. Okay. We'll have a look at what we could've used. Here's some examples. So "why are you crying?" inquired the concerned bird as he perched on the statue's shoulder. So that's an as with a relative clause there. And the second one we've got wept, the Prince as tears, streamed down his golden cheeks. So when you're doing this shared write, when you're doing your writing, sorry, if you want to go a little bit further, you could add an as at the end, after the speech as we have here. Don't worry. If that seems too much, you can leave it out as well. Okay. So I have laid out the things that each of the characters will say to make it a little bit easier for you. I would like you to write in a moment to write this section of speech between the two characters, laying it out, using the speech sandwich, and the new line and the new speaker. And I've got a copy here or here it is of what each person, what each character is saying. So I would like you to pause now and write this section of speech using the speech sandwich and the speech rules. And then afterwards, we'll check through it together pause now and have a go at writing this section of speech as I modelled Justin. Okay. So you need to make sure, just like with every other bit of writing that you check your punctuation and that it makes sense. So even with the speech, I want you to do your two finger check, and I want you to check that words are really there. And you have each part of your speech sandwich. It's like an equation when you're doing your maths. It needs to have all the bits to end up with the right result. Fantastic work. This was a real challenging lesson. So I'm really pleased that you gave it a go because we were incorporating including our new skills with speech in, within our story. So you've written a bit of speech, a bit of dialogue between two characters, and next we're going to be moving on to doing really exciting buildup, fantastic work today, lots and lots of concentration needed. And you did really, really well. Thank you for working so hard.

To continue to write the opening with speech

To continue to write the opening with speech

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